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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the internet.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #travel #countries #information #tv #internet
Travelling abroad is seen as a primary method to learn about other countries by some.The opponents,
however
, think it is a good idea to acquire some
information
 about them watching
TV
 and using the internet.Both sides need a
close
Suggestion
closer
 view, here, I believe. From one angle, the feeling provided for people from travelling can substantially increase the efficiency levels of getting
information
 about other country.When a human feels himself or herself alive from being in a particular
country he
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country, he
 or she becomes more likely to learn more about
this
 place.
In other words
, I think if they feel any sense
from
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of
 being as a representative of nation
of
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by
this
 government when they are inside of the people, eating the traditional cuisine of
this
 place or seeing natural habitat and historical facilities, it would be definitely better to get significant and substantial
information
. From another angle, learning about other countries with watching
TV
 or using the spider net is more
ecionomical
using the minimum of time or resources necessary for effectiveness
economical
.
This
 is because,
yoy
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
 can find easily any data about places throughout the internet. Especially, when you
utiize
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
utilize
utilise
 networking platforms like YouTube or IT
(
Accept space
(
Information
technologies
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Technologies
) technologies and gadgets like VR
(
Accept space
(
Virtual reality) headset or 3D googles in front of the smart
TV
 which can serve as a real view of
place
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the place
places
 you are interested in it may be more productive in the case of
ecomomy
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the economy
economy
an economy
 of the people and it can be affordable for them in order to get sufficient amount of
information
, I think. To conclude, it would be insensible to put one side over another here, I believe.The feeling provided for people from travelling brings benefit to gain
healthy proportion
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a healthy proportion
 of
information
.Meanwhile, in condition of
economical side
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the economical side
 of people with high satisfaction obtained by
TV
 or international network can bring
equal contribution
Suggestion
an equal contribution
 to learn about other countries.

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  • immersive
  • interactions
  • virtual means
  • cultural nuances
  • language acquisition
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • sustainability
  • virtual tours
  • documentaries
  • sophisticated
  • realistic representations
  • comprehensive understanding
  • financial status
  • carbon footprint
  • digital resources
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