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Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to alter our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

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In the contemporary era, it is argued that the personalities of the people are predefined and it is a consequence of genes they get from their parents before birth. I am personally inclined to agree with the statement that the characters of a
person
 are passed from their parents. But, it can be altered.
To begin
 with, the character is one, which built before birth genetically.
Moreover
, the personality and attitude of the people are directly linked with the genes which they obtained from their parents before birth.
Also
, most of the
time
 they behave
similarly
 as their parents and they react to different situations same as their guardians due to types of genes they gained. If a
person
 who has an aggressive mind,
then
 it would be highly chanced that his or her parents short tempered. To cite an example, a recent survey showed that 60% of people reacted and they possessed similar personalities as their parents had.
Hence
, character and nature of a
person
 is pre-exist.
However
, the character of the masses can be changed through different environments, guidance and learning from the tutor.
Firstly
, if a single
person
 with aggressive and loneliness may live with a happy family,
then
 the nature of a
person
 would definitely be improved into a better one.
In addition
 to
this
, guidance and learning from teacher both are good for the people in order to alter their personalities because the recent
time
 most of the children may successful to change personalities due to spending
time
 in better conditions under supervision.
Thus
, the nature of a
person
 can be changed through learning and distinct ambiance. To recapitulate,
although
 some people hold the view that characters of a
person
 are predefined but with the passage of
time
 it can be modified through guidance.
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