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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given table illustrates some pieces of information about underground rail line systems in 6 major cities
such
 as London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto, and Los Angeles. The information has been provided based on the number of travellers and the number of routes reserved by
railway
 systems. To commence, the longest
route
 and first developed rail line service started in London in 1863,
has
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and has
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 a
394 kilometre
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394-kilometre
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railway
route
 and 775 million passengers per year. But, the highest number of travellers
saw
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seen
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 in Tokyo about 1927, has a
155 kilometre
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155-kilometre
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route
 which is very low in terms of visitors
started
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who started
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 their journey in 1927
Moreover
, Kyoto and Los Angeles initiated their journey in underground
railway
 systems in 1981 and 2001 respectively.
Both
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In both
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the
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apply
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cities, the
numbers
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number
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 of
route
 and passenger is very low as compared to other cities where Kyoto is the lowest.
However
, Washington DC has opened its
railway
 system in 1976,
has
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which has
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 about
126 kilometre
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126-kilometre
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route
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routes
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 and a few numbers of passengers in terms of
route
. The 2nd oldest city developed
railway
 system at the beginning of the 20th century is known
as
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Paris, where they have a large ratio of passengers as compared to
railway
 routes.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, route with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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