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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine in your letter Explain what you like about the cafeteria Say what is wrong with it Suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Amal, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you of my expression about our cafeteria it is a gorgeous place at the university, and we would be changed for the better. As you know, you have some magnificent items it is very useful for us like chairs, tables and the colour of the walls. Let me tell you about some wrong the cafeteria has mistaken as the food is not healthy occasionally it is junk food, but the students prefer the healthy food like seafood, salad or any high-value dishes greatly.
Also
, you are using glass cups we don't like it if is blended, but we don't have time to wait for the drink to be cold. I want to suggest some ideas if you don't mind, the atmosphere is pretty colder if you want to change
this
 we appreciate.
Secondly
, the next to the cafeteria has a free place I have suggested bringing some books to read if we have time. I thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Monirah
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Task Achievement
While your letter includes elements of the task, you need to ensure clarity in expressing your views and providing specific examples. Aim for a more complete response by elaborating on each point.
Task Achievement
The writing tone should be formal and appropriate for a letter to a magazine. Refrain from using colloquial language and maintain a professional tone throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter should have a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should have a single, clear idea with supporting sentences.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a proper greeting and closing is used. In formal letters, it is highly recommended to start with 'Dear Sir/Madam,' or the title and last name if known, and to end with 'Yours sincerely,' followed by your full name.
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