The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The bar chart provides information about the frequency of Americans
ate
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eating
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at fast
food
restaurants from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
, it can be seen that the majority of
people
in the USA ate at least once a week at fast
food
restaurants in the years 2003 and 2006,
whereas
, in 2013, eating fast
food
once or twice a month
becoming
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became
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more popular.
According to
the figure, only around 4% of
people
in the USA consumed fast
food
daily in 2003 and slightly lower in both 2006 and 2013. The habit of eating fast
food
several times a week was significant in 2006 which accounted for 20%,
while
only 17% and 16% in 2003 and 2013, respectively. The frequency of American consuming junk
food
once a week was the highest in 2006 at around 33%. Consuming fast
food
once or twice a month was higher in 2013 at 33%, followed by, 30% in 2003 and 25% in 2006. The percentage of
people
eating fast
food
several times a year appeared to be identical at 15% in both 2006 and 2013.
Finally
, only 5% of
people
in the USA
who
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apply
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had never eaten at fast
food
restaurants.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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