Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, others think that zoos are useful to protect rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The future existence of the animal parks is a heated topic that has been debated over the years. Mainly the animal conservation organizations complains that these places are harmful for animals and an any living being must not be caged like
this
, while those who are against them believe that the zoos help to protect the endangered species.
This
essay will discuss the both aspects of the scenario before coming to a conclusion.
To begin
with, most animal parks use cages to hold the creature which means they are prisoned to a one place which is very
crual
neither warm nor very cold; giving relief from heat
cool
. An
evey
(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception
every
living being must have right to
wonder
move about aimlessly or without any destination, often in search of food or employment
wander
around itself.
Moreover
, holding them just for the amusement of the
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
is ethically wrong, and
accoring
(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with
according
to some religions
also
caging animal is considered to be a sin. Another factor favour to
this
is the various harmful activities these animals subjected to inside the zoos. In order to put out shows for the audience they were trained with many kinds of stunts.
For example
, in the elephant shows in a Sri Lankan zoo, elephants have to
standup
Suggestion
stand up
using only two
feets
the part of the leg of a human being below the ankle joint
feet
. Considering the methods used to train
them we
Accept comma addition
them, we
can assume the life of these animals inside the zoos.
On the other hand
, most zoos have animals that are extinct from the other part of the earth.
For example
, one of the zoo has a white tiger which is known to be the
last
one of its kind.
Furthermore
, some of these institutions use science to reproduce some endangered animal kinds by using various breeding mechanisms.
Hence
, they are of the opinion that these animal parks are the only way to save
such
species form leaving the surface of the earth. To recapitulate,
although
zoos provide a significant effort towards saving some species, in my view, the whole concept of the animal park is ethically wrong and considering the methods used to hold these animals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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