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It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives.How could robots be used in the future?will this development be positive or negative development?

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 because of the improvement in many technological areas,
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 have started to influence people’s lives in myriad fields. The objective of
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 and the reasons why I think it will be a positive development. First of all, one of the main
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. ing. To cite an example ,to do a certain group of
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 as building houses , people must spend lots of time
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people will be tired. Using
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 the demand on workers, which creates
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 workers. The other field in which
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 about the universe. It is a clear fact that those who do
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 about cosmic objects
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 will be helpful for scientists. It is because
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faster than human brains, and the results which
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 that people can use
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 than humans do, and
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,
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 for humans.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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