the chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.summarize the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.summarize the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.summarize the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A glance at the following bar chart reveals data about the sum of male and female
participants
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in the
Olympics
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in four different years.
In
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the line graph illustrates the total of
participants
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in these years.
Overall
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looking at the bar chart depicts an increase in the portion of
participants
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in the
Olympics
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. In the first
year
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women roughly attended
in
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the
Olympics
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while
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the majority of
participants
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were men. Significantly, in 2012 women got
much
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more number of
athletes
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attending
in
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the
Olympics
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by
then
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. The line graph
on the other hand
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shows a dramatic climb in the number of
athletes
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during these four years of taking place
the
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Olympics
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. In 1924 just 3000
of
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athletes
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were in the
Olympics
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whilst more than 10000
athletes
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participated in 2012. To summarize the total number of attendants in
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Olympics
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the Olympics
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rose from 1924 to 2012 and women specifically had a remarkable change in
this
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statistic from almost 100 people in 1924 to
near
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5000 participation in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, olympics, athletes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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