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With an increasing population communicating via the Internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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With coming 21 century social media sharply increased, according to communicating via
internet
 resources like
text
 massages became a popular.
However
,
face
 to
face
 communication has
lots
people who are destined to die soon
lost
 its place among people. I am
on
Suggestion
of
 the view that, both of them should be in a
balance
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balanced
 and in
this
 essay I will explore my ideas with reasons and examples before coming to a conclusion. On the one hand, the use of modern technology has grown substantially leading to frequent use of video calls, emails,
text
 messages and voice mails.
Firstly
, nowadays
internet
 available in all parts of the world, people can communicate with their friends, family and clients across the world in any time of the day. Another important benefit of using
text
massages
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
messages
 like Facebook, Instagram, Telegram is that, persons can discuss topics, exchange with opinions, give
advises
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advise
 to each other for being different continents or countries.
In addition
, we can
surfing
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surf
 in
internet
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the internet
 and find any useful or absorbing information with one click.
On the other hand
, there are so many advantages of
face
 to
face
 communication, especially among people in our modern life. I am sure that, human cannot explore all emotions via
internet
text
massages
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
messages
.
For instance
, you can
chatting
Suggestion
chat
 with friends or family
members and
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members, and
 they can write
,,
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,
 I am good '' but, you do not know it was true or not. You cannot feel their natural emotions and cannot show
your
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
. Another necessary point is that, with
face
 to
face
 communication we can hug, touch, kiss and support our dear, I am convinced that it is the most important thing. To sum up, when we analyse the issue in depth, it becomes crystal clear that, everything should be in own place and in balance. In some cases
internet
 is very helpful in our society,
however we
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however, we
 must never forget about
face
 to
face
communicate
Suggestion
communicating
 with people.
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