The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.
The pie charts compare and contrast data on the changes
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percentage of
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of youngs' charity which is accepted and expended in the United States in 2016.
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, it can be clearly seen that contributed food products make
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basic
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income,
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a majority of expenses. Total salary sources are a bit higher than expenditures. In detail, donated food provides a large share of wealth sources for the charity, is 86%,
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is a program service,
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95.8%. The other categories are smaller. The
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% of total wages and program receipt performs 2.2% of the cash. But other categories are very small, investment revenue, government grants and other revenue are accounting only 0.8 % combined. Expenditure categories are lesser than yield types, there are only two other
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things. Fundraising and management and general, accounting for 2.6 %and 1.6 % exactly.The total fund is 53561580$ and it is enough to cover the expenditures of 53224869$
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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