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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

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In the modern world, the number of private cars is increasing. In
this
 regard, it is true that now transporting goods and getting a final destination are getting harder for car drivers. I completely agree with
this
 statement,
however
, there are many ways to solve
this
 problem. There is no denying that the main cause of
this
 problem is affordable types of vehicle that can be used by city dwellers without any struggles. In others words, the world of vehicles is advanced and reduced in price.
Consequently
, many individuals have owned
a
Suggestion
an
 auto. A good illustration of
this
 is big cities, where every family has at least one automobile.
Moreover
, there is a wide range of vehicles, which can be used for transportation,
such
 as bicycles, motor bicycles and trucks. There are making the situation even worse.
For example
, if private car owners share their machine with someone, the traffic jam can be reduced.
On the other hand
, the government regulation can alleviate
this
 situation. It is clear that if the authorities, tax drivers heavily, they will use public transports,
such
 as buses and underground. To illustrate, in New Zeland, having a private auto is costly.
As a result
, many town dwellers prefer to use public transports.
Furthermore
, the authorities can prohibit to import foreign transports in their country. It will motivate domestic business and reduce traffic jam.
For example
, German is widely known because of its strict policy to imported transports.
As a result
, they are producing their brands,
such
 as Mercedes and Audi. To conclude,
although
 traffic jam is a major issue for the authorities, it can be solved by collective measures, which are taken by the government,
such
 as introducing extra taxes for the drivers and prohibiting to import vehicles from abroad.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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