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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantage of this outweighs the disadvantages.Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people claim that learning a foreign speech at primary school has more benefits than studying it at secondary school.
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 essay takes a view of both sides of the argument.
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 of all, acknowledge is the key to everything and the more we know, the better it is. Learning a foreign dialect at primary school could be a great option for children, because nowadays every job requires multilingual speakers so obviously
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 could be considered as an advantage.
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, the earlier, the better and it is clear that children receive the information more quickly than adults do,
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 it is easier to acquire skill in
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 field while being a youngster.
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, despite of the advantages mentioned below, children can encounter difficulty if they are not able to develop expertise which could lead to a lower self-esteem and losing motivation for future accomplishments.
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, little pupils are at the beginning of their adventure and too much information given to them can create a big chaos in their head. While pumping details and new languages
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 their own, it is a chance to combine the information and not to be able to speak
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 in neither language. As an example, I personally grew up speaking three languages, parallel, Romanian, Hungarian and English. I was taught to speak in my early ages. Knowing more than one speech is extraordinary and I feel lucky, but sometimes I have difficulties on finding the right word while speaking a language. In conclusion, a foreign language is good to be gathered whenever in your life are going to achieve it.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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