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In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. Do the benefits of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
tourism
 has become part of our life and a lot of money is spent on it.Without a doubt, international
tourism
 has many advantages that made many countries depend on it to increase its economy
.
Accept space
.
In
this
 essay, I will examine the advantages and disadvantages of world
tourism
 and provide a logical conclusion.
firstly
Suggestion
Firstly
, The most important benefit is improvement of people's income. By increasing number of tourist lead to open more facilities, include hotels, restaurants and so on.These can provide thousands of jobs for the people of the country,
for instance
 guide,
tourism
 and taxi or even some of them rent their houses to the tourist.
in
Suggestion
In
 addition, it can enrich people's lives by learning about other communities culture and customs.
On the other hand
, the drawback is people can lose some of their privacy.Most tourist destinations placed in residential areas. So the places became crowded with strangers and noise.It affects their lifestyle In conclusion, there is no denying that world travellers have numerous advantages for economic growth in all countries.
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