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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The 1st
bar
 chart illustrates the figure
of
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marriages
 and the percentage of divorce in the year 1970 to 2000. The 2nd
bar
 sketch demonstrates the marital status of adults in the years 1970 and 2000.
According to
 the first
bar
 chart, there was a downward trend in the number of
marriages
 and rates of divorces. The highest separation percentage and most numbers of
marriages
 have shown respectively at about 1.4 million and 2.5 million in 1980.
However
, the highest figure
of
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marriages
 has
also
 shown in 1970 and after that, it decreases over the period. The lowest amount of
marriages
 has shown at about 2 million in the year 2000
while
 the separation ratio is decreasing
this
 year. On the flip side,
from
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the 2nd
bar
 graph is divided into 4 distinct categories – never categories, married, widowed and divorced in between 1970 and 2000. The marital status of adult Americans in 1970 is that 60
percent
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 of an adult is married
and
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remains the greatest of all groups.
On the other hand
, the amount of
marriage
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marriages
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 decreases
at
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 about 11
percent
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per cent
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 in 2000.
However
, the
amount
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 of widowed
decreases
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 as compared to 2000. The figure
of
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 unmarried adults is 12
percent
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per cent
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 in 1970
while
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it goes up in 2000
while
 the separation percentage is increasing in 2000 as compared to 1970.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, marriages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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