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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The 1st
bar
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 chart illustrates the figure
of
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marriages
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 and the percentage of divorce in the year 1970 to 2000. The 2nd
bar
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 sketch demonstrates the marital status of adults in the years 1970 and 2000.
According to
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 the first
bar
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 chart, there was a downward trend in the number of
marriages
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 and rates of divorces. The highest separation percentage and most numbers of
marriages
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 have shown respectively at about 1.4 million and 2.5 million in 1980.
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, the highest figure
of
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marriages
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 has
also
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 shown in 1970 and after that, it decreases over the period. The lowest amount of
marriages
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 has shown at about 2 million in the year 2000
while
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 the separation ratio is decreasing
this
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 year. On the flip side,
from
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the 2nd
bar
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 graph is divided into 4 distinct categories – never categories, married, widowed and divorced in between 1970 and 2000. The marital status of adult Americans in 1970 is that 60
percent
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 of an adult is married
and
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remains the greatest of all groups.
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, the amount of
marriage
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marriages
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 decreases
at
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 about 11
percent
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 in 2000.
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, the
amount
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number
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 of widowed
decreases
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 as compared to 2000. The figure
of
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for
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 unmarried adults is 12
percent
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per cent
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 in 1970
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while
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it goes up in 2000
while
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 the separation percentage is increasing in 2000 as compared to 1970.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, marriages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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