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7. In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying both in and after school, and have less free time. Do you think it has the positive or negative effects on children and society

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In some nations, parents have a tendency to put pressure on their children, which force them to spend excessive hours on studying and to ignore leisure activities.
This
 trend exerts both beneficial and damaging affects children as well as the whole society. On the one hand, the focus on education benefits for younger generations as well as the community they live in. It is obvious that the more time spent on acquiring new knowledge, the higher results students can obtain.
Consequently
,
such
 excellent academic achievements will help children stand a good opportunity to get promising career prospects since well-known corporations are likely to prioritize applicants with outstanding performances at school.
As a result
, without unemployment, the government would have saved a huge number of national budget for investments in public infrastructures or social farewell.
On the other hand
, there are some negative impacts of studying too much for children that should be taken into consideration.
Firstly
, they would probably suffer from some psychological problems if they were forced to study all the time. Obviously, students can easily lose a sense of satisfaction when they have to learn much abstract knowledge.
Instead
 of being excited, they usually feel stressed and depressed with much information.
Furthermore
, students need to be given more opportunities to develop practical skills
such
 as communication skills because having only knowledge cannot prepare students for their future. All in all, study and life should be focused equally in order to ensure the well-rounded developments of children. It is recommended that students should devote time to beneficial activities
such
 as sports which help them not only relax after stressful studying hours but
also
 enhance physical fitness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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