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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

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The role of the social media is a crucial in our daily life. Despite its initial purpose, which is providing breaking and beneficial news, it
also
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 world-renowned for posting occasionally fake report.
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 the power of media is undeniable and it
is manifests
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manifests
is manifesting
has manifested
manifest
 itself in opinions and attitudes of the people. According to some people there is not much that could be done about it and I
also
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 do think so. The media
has
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have
 an extraordinary as it can make any person popular within a day and
also
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 helps the celebrities to remain popular even if they suffering from
artistic plateu
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the artistic plateau
artistic plateau
 or if they are already retired. On top of it
also
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 can easily damage the reputation of, mainly, celebrities by sharing the information which they are would like to keep as a secret. For ordinary people it
migh
expresses possibility
might
may
 seem interesting or
even entertaining but
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even entertaining, but
 they do not even realize how it is difficult for well-
knowned
apprehended with certainty
known
 people to be on their best behaviour because of
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 burden of responsibility. So that becomes the value
for
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of
 being famous nowadays with no privacy. The power of social media is
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 in manipulation as far as people now are
tend
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tending
 to believe everything that they hear.
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 of which quite frequently they found themselves in a conflict situation. Those manipulations can be based on different motives,
such
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 as religious, cultural and nationalistic. As an illustration of which might be considered the situation in some east countries which suffered from the
propanganda
information that is spread for the purpose of promoting some cause
propaganda
 of local media. And if take into account that what human now is capable of it becomes clear that there is nothing to do about it. In conclusion, nowadays the media
has
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have
 great capability. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 will keep being a powerful unless people believe in everything they are telling them.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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