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Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should been encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc. to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued by an overwhelming majority of people that youngsters should go to
academy
 and continue their education,
although
 others assume that it is much better if they
work
 straight after high school in the building industry or as a car repair. I am of the opinion that both of the views have their advantages and drawbacks as well and young people should choose their paths in terms of their interests and objectives. There are two prominent reasons why going straight to educational institution can be seen profitable. A large number of students choose to go
academy
instead
 of seeking for operation. In
this
 way, they can be ensured that they have a promising future.
This
 is because these days, an increasing number of corporations employ the employees who have
academy
 degrees and are professional in a specific major.
Moreover
, employees should be able to speak foreign languages, particularly international languages and they
also
 should be able to
work
 with computer and social media. If student continue their study in
academy
 the be able to develop
this
 criterion;
therefore
 they may gain decent well-paid task with high prestige and guarantee their future.
On the other hand
, may be some student choose to
work
, simply because they want to live independent and. Being independent is very important for some youngster. Maybe they want to get married and build their own families or maybe they want to have enough money to travel around, so getting
work
 in some well-paid industry
such
 as building industry and car repairing provide them with enough money to pursue their goals.
Furthermore
, as they start their business from early life, so they gain more experience and practical knowledge and may become professional expert and gain much more money than individuals who graduated from universities. In conclusion, it seems to me that, as both view have their upsides and downsides, it should be for young people who choose their career route according to their interest and goals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • higher education
  • vocational training
  • skillset
  • employment landscape
  • economic contributions
  • hands-on experience
  • critical thinking skills
  • practical knowledge
  • tuition fees
  • trade professions
  • essential workforce
  • academic qualifications
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