Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should been encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc. to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued by an overwhelming majority of people that youngsters should go to

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and continue their education,

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others assume that it is much better if they

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straight after high school in the building industry or as a car repair. I am of the opinion that both of the views have their advantages and drawbacks as well and young people should choose their paths in terms of their interests and objectives. There are two prominent reasons why going straight to educational institution can be seen profitable. A large number of students choose to go

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of seeking for operation. In

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way, they can be ensured that they have a promising future.

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is because these days, an increasing number of corporations employ the employees who have

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degrees and are professional in a specific major.

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, employees should be able to speak foreign languages, particularly international languages and they

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should be able to

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with computer and social media. If student continue their study in

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the be able to develop

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criterion;

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they may gain decent well-paid task with high prestige and guarantee their future.

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, may be some student choose to

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, simply because they want to live independent and. Being independent is very important for some youngster. Maybe they want to get married and build their own families or maybe they want to have enough money to travel around, so getting

work

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in some well-paid industry

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as building industry and car repairing provide them with enough money to pursue their goals.

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, as they start their business from early life, so they gain more experience and practical knowledge and may become professional expert and gain much more money than individuals who graduated from universities. In conclusion, it seems to me that, as both view have their upsides and downsides, it should be for young people who choose their career route according to their interest and goals.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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330 words

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vocational training
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employment landscape
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Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should been encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc. to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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