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Globalisation has both advantages and disadvantages. Discuss both and give your opinion

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It is true that owing to technology development world become smaller and smaller day by day. It leads to globalisation throughout the universe.
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, there are pros and cons to globalize the countries, in my opinion, the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages. In the one hand, there are several benefits for the globalisation.
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, developed countries can outsource their production to poorer countries to make lower final prices.
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, majority of famous car manufacturer
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 as TOYOTA, outsource the whole car manufacturing or some parts of the car to other countries. Apart from the customers which can purchase the goods cheaper, a great deal of job opportunity creates in poorer countries.
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, people from poorer countries can migrate to the developed countries for work and study, which help to reduce the rate of unemployment.
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, by globalisation, crises like diseases and other international problems can be overcome easily.
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, even though, there are several benefits in regard to globalization, there are still many drawbacks. While outsourcing is beneficial for the poorer countries, they may lose their resources easy and cheap.
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, they may use their underground resources to produce materials at a very low price.
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, big corporations may exploit cheap workers without considering their rights.
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, migration from poor countries to the rich one lead to lack of qualified and experienced worker in the origin countries. In conclusion,
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, globalization is beneficial and disadvantageous for all countries and people, in my opinion, the merits far outweigh the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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