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Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present. Discuss the two views and give your own opinion.

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Some say that the past
history
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 has considerable less significant for people
thesedays
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these days
;
however
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, others would argue that gathering knowledge about the ancient
historiacal
of or relating to the study of history
historical
 aspects can prove to be beneficial in analysing the present situation.
Although
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 there are many technological advancements has made
thesedays
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these days
 where
history
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 is playing no role, I believe, connecting to
ancenstoral
inherited or inheritable by established rules (usually legal rules) of descent
ancestral
 views is essential for
further
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 progress. On the one hand, some people consider that
history
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 is insignificant in modern
day
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 due to the fact that there are many innovations and progress
done
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 in technology, in almost every field, where
old methods
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the old methods
 are of no significance.
For example
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, a recent article published in The Age revealed that with the invention of smart phones, where people can avail the benefits of various applications in the
orm
the phonological or orthographic sound or appearance of a word that can be used to describe or identify something
form
 of
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
Veda
videos
 calling, games, the old methods of writing
letter
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letters
 or post cards to
coonect
connect, fasten, or put together two or more pieces
connect
contact
connected
 with friends and family has almost forgotten by the
humans
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human
 beings of
modern era
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the modern era
.
Therefore
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, I believe
history
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 has very less impact on contemporary
day
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 to
day
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 lives of the society. One the other hand, there are some people who believe that it is always essential to stay in touch with old histories as we can learn from
there
of them or themselves
their
 own old and authentic prospects, which have long lasting effects with no flaws.
For instance
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, many people these days have been seen using traditional and therapeutic measures to cure certain diseases, which
can not
can not
cannot
 be controlled and treated by any other methods,
such
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 as massage therapy or traditional
chinese
a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
 way of using needles to cure long term
illnesess
impairment of normal physiological function affecting part or all of an organism
illnesses
illness
.
Moreover
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, using herbal medicines with no side effects so that people can be treated rapidly and effectively.
Hence
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, I believe it is
indispendable
not to be dispensed with; essential
indispensable
 to be connected with
history
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 and old cultures to get insight into present times for progressing ahead. In conclusion, even though latest technological advances have
lead
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led
 to greater achievements with historical evidence to some extent
,
Accept space
,
 in my opinion being in touch with
history
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 is always commendable as there are more
ancestoral
inherited or inheritable by established rules (usually legal rules) of descent
ancestral
 techniques to get remedies for present
day
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 and to make apprehend the recent time.
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