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The bar graph below shows the total case of virus in ASEAN countries per 10 May 2020.

The bar graph below shows the total case of virus in ASEAN countries per 10 May 2020.
The bar chart provides information about the covid-19
case
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cases
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 in ASEAN.
Singapore
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 had the highest amount of cases,
while
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 Laos had the least
number
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 of cases.
Indonesia
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 is the
second
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 highest with
the
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a
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 total
11.396
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of 11.396
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 cases. The table shows the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 that confirmed,
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death
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died
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 and recovered In three different regions of
Indonesia
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.
According to
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 the bar chart,
Singapore
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 was the highest
following
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followed
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 by
Indonesia
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, Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, Vietnam, Myanmar, Brunei, Cambodia and
last
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 but not least Laos with the lowest
number
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 of affected
people
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.
Singapore
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 and
Indonesia
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 only got a
slight
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slightly
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different
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difference
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while
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Singapore
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 and laos got a
big
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bit
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different
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difference
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. The table shows that
jakarta
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Jakarta
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 had the highest amount of confirmed and
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death
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dead
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people
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whereas
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 east
java
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 had the lowest
number
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 of affected and
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death
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dead
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people
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. East
Java
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 and west
Java
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 only got a
slight
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slightly
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different
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difference
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of
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in
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 confirmed
people
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,
on the other
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hand
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,hand
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 the
number
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 of
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death
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dead
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people
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 in west
Java
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 was the least
from
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among
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 the three other regions.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words singapore, number, indonesia, people, death, java with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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