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The bar graph below shows about the ampunt of virus affected

The bar graph below shows about the ampunt of virus affected
The bar chart provides information about the virus case in ASEAN.
Singapore
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 had the highest amount of cases,
while
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 Laos had the least total of cases.
Indonesia
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 is the
second
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 highest with
the
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a
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 total
11.396
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of 11.396
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 cases. The table shows the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 that confirmed,
death
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died
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 and recovered In three different regions of
Indonesia
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According to
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 the bar chart,
Singapore
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 was
the
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on the
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 high rise
following
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followed
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 by
Indonesia
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, Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, Vietnam, Myanmar, Brunei, Cambodia and
last
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 but not least Laos with the lowest number of affected
people
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.
Singapore
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 and
Indonesia
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 only got a slight
different
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difference
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 whilst
Singapore
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 and Laos got a big difference. The table shows that Jakarta had the highest amount of confirmed and dead
people
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,
whereas
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 east
Java
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 had the lowest number of affected and dying
people
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. East
Java
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 and West
Java
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 only got a slight difference
of
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in
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 confirmed
people
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,
on the other
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hand
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,hand
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 the number of
death
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dead
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people
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 in West
Java
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 was the least
from
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among
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 the three other regions.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words singapore, indonesia, people, java with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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