In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some would argue that the government should have a large budget for constructing new railway systems for very fast
trains
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between
cities
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,
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others say that the fund should be spent on developing public
transportation
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.
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constructing railway lines for speedy
trains
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is essential to reduce car
accidents
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, l believe that improving public transport is essential to reduce
air
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pollution
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in
cities
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. On the one hand, building new developments and quick
trains
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provide safety for
people
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who travel regularly. Recently, the number of car
accidents
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increased significantly
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the dangerous roads and undeveloped infrastructure of highways between
cities
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,
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if an accident occurs, there will be no one able to help those
people
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because they are outside
cities
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, where there are not enough possibilities to help. Having said that constructing lines for very fast
trains
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encourages
people
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to use them because it is faster and safer.
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, in 2018, Saudi Arabia had the highest number of
accidents
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that occurred between
cities
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, it is considered 80% of cars
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bad roads and weather conditions.
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, I think that there are several solutions to address
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problem
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as improving roads rather than spending a huge money to build lines for development
trains
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.
On the other hand
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, improving public
transportation
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is a better way to reduce
air
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pollution
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in the big
cities
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because these improvements will encourage
people
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to use public buses or
trains
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rather than their cars in order to avoid traffic which will decrease carbon emissions in
cities
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. Large
cities
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now suffer from
air
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pollution
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which causes some breathing problems, liver cancer and even a big problem with climate change as well,
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using public
transportation
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is a viable solution to
this
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problem.
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, the Japanese government in the
last
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decade has developed and improved all public transport in order to avoid
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issue which is now Tokyo the only unpolluted city in the world,
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it has population density.
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, from my point of view, focusing on public transport is extremely important now than anything to reduce the carbon footprint in the big
cities
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. In conclusion,
although
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building new railways for very fast
trains
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is important to avoid tragic
accidents
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.
However
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, I believe that spending money on improving public
transportation
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is extremely crucial for reducing serious
air
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pollution
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in
cities
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.
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