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We have developed into a throwaway society. What can be done to overcome the problems?

#society
Now, we
face
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are faced
 with tremendous problems caused by humankind which are impacted to our community to become
throwaway
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a throwaway society
society
.
However
, these issues can be tackled through new inventions by
government
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the government
 like
reduce
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to reduce
reducing
 an overwhelming amount of wastages or effective measures. There are plenty of ways to avoid from
such
ya
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
a
 fundamental
problems
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problem
. The best solution
to
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for
this
 use a technology centric lifestyle to benefit of our
society
.
For instance
, create devices to change the single-use products to recyclable items.
Also
, produce a durable goods are
good
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the best
 approach which can deal with adverse impacts and hazardous wastes.
Furthermore
, there is a school of thought that government should lessen the most production.
On the other hand
, most countries’ cumulative efforts doesn’t enough to revert the damage. Other sensible steps to address
this
 issue depends not only for
government
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the government
,
also
 for us. People should try reduce to use non-recyclable packets, bags and goods as much as possible. In
school pupils
Accept comma addition
school, pupils
 must be
awared
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
 about their responsibilities in
society
 to prospect it. Individuals should classify household wastes as recyclable and non-recyclable and recyclable wastes should be used to produce new products. In conclusion, there is not a shadow of doubt that continues development of technology and our negligence allow
to
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for
 creation of a throwaway
society
. But there is the possibility that new alterations and views of humankind to our
society
 help to tackle
this problems
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this problem
these problems
.
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