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In the future books will exist only on computers. Do you agree?

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New technology has been developed intensive in all directions, it is quite clear that it has presented good news in
education system
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the education system
.
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, it’s does not seem reasonable to suggest technology can effect the destruction of the books. There are
these
plural of that
those
 who maintain that computers helps us to find any information which we need.
Also
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 computers opened the way to plenty of opportunities in education system and now every subject
book
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 are available to us. People can download every
book
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 that they need
instead
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 of buy it wasting their money
also
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 their time.
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, beside of some alterations in society, it is
great way
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a great way
 to save valuable
informations
a message received and understood
information
 and deliver it for our generation from century to century. Notwithstanding, given opportunities
by
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with
 technology
,
Accept space
,
 it does not mean that
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book
Suggestion
the book
 will
disappeared
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disappear
 and valuable information will exist only on computers. Given the growing number of libraries
,
Accept space
,
 it’s hard to believe that
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book
Suggestion
books
the book
 will disappear. More people
tells
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say
tell
 that they feel another specific atmosphere when they read than electronic variants.
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Also it
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Also, it
 should be noted that reading from computers is substantially harmful. It was worth pointing out that in the world exist majority of people who suppose to collect books in their house. We can see that books occupy
special place
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a special place
 for people. In conclusion, books are not letters in monitor, books are another world you visit when you open it. In spite of technologies extra aids for people, there can be no doubt that valuable wealth
such
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 as books will not exist only on computers.
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