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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter explain why you changed jobs, describe your new job, tell him/her other news

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Dear Ashish, I hope you are well and happy with your new
marriage
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 life. I am
also
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 doing great here. I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about my new
job
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 in one of my favourite construction companies, and its name is L & T construction Pvt. Ltd. I was doing
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job
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the job
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 as a civil supervisor in a small contractor company before
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job
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. The company was good but there was no chance of my bright career. My salary was
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 not sufficient as per my experience. Luckily, I
offered
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was offered
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 a
job
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 from
biggest
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the biggest
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 construction company
last
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 week. My interview was excellent, they decided to pay fifty thousand per month, which was two times
of
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my previous salary. Presently, I am on the post of
senior
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a senior
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 civil engineer at one site in Mumbai. I know, you will be very happy
from
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about
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 my success. I
also
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 want to tell you one more
good
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piece of good
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 news, which is my engagement celebration
next
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 month. Her name is Himani Panchal, and she is
exact
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 a year younger than me. She had completed
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her Masters
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Masters
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master
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 in commerce in 2017, and now doing a
job
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 in her uncle’s office. We are planning to go to Canada till
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 year, and I am preparing for
IELTS
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the IELTS
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 exam. I will definitely send you an invitation
of
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to
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 my engagement ceremony soon. I hope we will meet soon, and do not forget to give me
reply
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a reply
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of
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to
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this
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 letter. Take care. Yours lovingly, Jay Panchal
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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