Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?

It is generally believed that some ex-criminals carry out crimes again just after their release from prison. In my opinion, the lack of effective rehabilitation system and vocational training are the major causes of
reoffending
offending against or breaking a law or rule
offending
crimes. I believe that, reformative steps should be taken to improve already existing system and criminals should be
giving
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given
the chance of educating themselves. The
first
and foremost reason for
offending crime
Accept comma addition
offending, crime
again and again may be criminals are not given the opportunity to heal themselves through rehabilitation.
This
plays a vital role in the
wellbeing
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well being
of wrongdoers. 
Furthermore
, offenders stay in rooms which are surrounded by four walls, and merely
this
could be psychologically challenging for anyone. 
In other words
, rooms should be designed by considering
humanitary
marked by humanistic values and devotion to human welfare
humanitarian
values, and of course it is still required to take measures to prevent them
to escape
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escaping
from the building. Emotional health of prisoners should be taken into account when combatting
futher
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
illegal acts.
In other words
, punitive systems should be left,
instead
we might concentrate on
healing process
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the healing process
. In old times, people used to get medicated through water sound and classical music.
Similar approach
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A similar approach
may contribute to overcome
this
problem.
For example
, In Brazil, there is a compulsory reading hour each day and sports sessions as well.
Secondly
, many cannot find a job when they are gone out
from
Suggestion
of
jail, vocational training can tackle the issue of being unemployed for long years and
consequently
it results in less crime. In conclusion, I believe that, there should be a shift from
strict and punitive system
Suggestion
a strict and punitive system
to
Suggestion
for
of
rehabilitation. Past experiences can help us understand the importance of therapy. More education should be given to fight over the negative consequences associated with criminals and their unlawful actions
such
as unemployment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Reintegrate
  • Social stigma
  • Recidivism
  • Criminal records
  • Ex-offender
  • Associations
  • Comprehensive
  • Workforce
  • Mentoring
  • Incentivize
  • Stigmatize
  • Subsidies
  • Legitimate
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