The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of the people who visit tourist centres, including wildlife
parks
, historic houses and monuments, museum
and galleries, and theme Fix the agreement mistake
museums
parks
by
respectively. Change preposition
apply
In addition
, in
the near table demonstrates five distinctive tourist attractions where are in the theme park hosted by the visitors.
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Overall
, wildlife parks
and zoos had just 9 % Change preposition
of nationally
nationally
tourists in 1999 in the United Kingdom. By 7% Change the word
national
increasing
, travellers Wrong verb form
increase
had
preferred to see historic houses and monuments. Meanwhile, they Unnecessary verb
apply
had
spent their spare time in Unnecessary verb
apply
the
museums and galleries 37 Correct article usage
apply
percentages
of whole visitors. The most popular place was the theme Replace the word
per cent
parks
concepts, particularly almost half of Change the noun form
park
tourists
had Correct article usage
the tourists
been
used Unnecessary verb
apply
blackpool
pleasure beach. Other facilities Change the capitalization
Blackpool
in
there, Change preposition
apply
alton
towers and Change the capitalization
Alton
pleasuland
Correct your spelling
pleasant
had
been visited Unnecessary verb
apply
nearly
Change preposition
at nearly
same
rate (17% and 16%). Correct article usage
the same
Also
, chessington world of adventures and legoland
, Change the capitalization
Legoland
windsor
had exactly same the number of individuals which is 10 people out of 100.Change the capitalization
Windsor
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