The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of the people who visit tourist centres, including wildlife
parks
, historic houses and monuments,
museum
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and galleries, and theme
parks
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respectively.
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the near table demonstrates five distinctive tourist attractions where are in the theme park hosted by the visitors.
Overall
, wildlife
parks
and zoos had just 9 %
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of nationally
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nationally
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tourists in 1999 in the United Kingdom. By 7%
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, travellers
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preferred to see historic houses and monuments. Meanwhile, they
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spent their spare time in
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museums and galleries 37
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of whole visitors. The most popular place was the theme
parks
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concepts, particularly almost half of
tourists
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the tourists
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had
been
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used
blackpool
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pleasure beach. Other facilities
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there,
alton
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towers and
pleasuland
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pleasant
had
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been visited
nearly
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same
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rate (17% and 16%).
Also
, chessington world of adventures and
legoland
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,
windsor
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had exactly same the number of individuals which is 10 people out of 100.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words parks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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