The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999.

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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of the people who visit tourist centres, including wildlife

parks

, historic houses and monuments,

museum

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museums

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and galleries, and theme

parks

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respectively.

In addition

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the near table demonstrates five distinctive tourist attractions where are in the theme park hosted by the visitors.

Overall

, wildlife

parks

and zoos had just 9 %

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of nationally

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nationally

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tourists in 1999 in the United Kingdom. By 7%

increasing

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, travellers

had

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preferred to see historic houses and monuments. Meanwhile, they

had

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spent their spare time in

the

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museums and galleries 37

percentages

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per cent

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of whole visitors. The most popular place was the theme

parks

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concepts, particularly almost half of

tourists

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the tourists

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had

been

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used

blackpool

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pleasure beach. Other facilities

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there,

alton

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towers and

pleasuland

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pleasant

had

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been visited

nearly

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at nearly

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same

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rate (17% and 16%).

Also

, chessington world of adventures and

legoland

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windsor

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had exactly same the number of individuals which is 10 people out of 100.

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1Word repetition
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22Grammar mistakes
 

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154 words

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Clear and correct grammar

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The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999.

Some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive development or a negative one?

Nowadays, instead of locally sourced produce, many supermarkets sell a variety of foods imported from countries all across the world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.