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Some people think that to produce a happier society we must ensure that there is only a small difference in earnings between the rich and the poor. To what extent do you agree?

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It is believed by a few individuals that investing time for developing a successful career is a major part of life, while others thinks that spending moment with family and friends is more necessary. I profoundly agree with the former statement,
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however, both
 statements are having their own importance. Today’s in the contemporary era, there is a big completion to get success and financially strong in career and for the same reason the ones has to pay the cost, by spending less space with family and friends to achieve the luxury lifestyle.
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 very important to spend moment family and friends to make the relationship stronger and provide a proper space to children so that they won’t feel isolated in life and they could have good up brining and they could
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 learn the traditions thought living together, as we are very well aware that family plays the vital role to build a great nations and it
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 help us to reduce the stress at workplace, if we would stay together and spend quality movement with our parents & family and friends. To conclude
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 both the aspects are equally essential to sustain a successful Life as family and friends are the one to boost us and to reach of the principle of success along with the set goal for our life which is highly required with the best lifestyle.
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