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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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In
few location
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the few locations
few locations
a few locations
 of
united states
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the united states
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young people are restricted for roaming in late night
due t
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due to
duet
 various reasons
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In my opinion it is for their benefit
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This
 essay will focus on the upsides of it.
Firstly
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There are known areas in the states which are involved in antisocial activities like
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drugs
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shooting
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and adult crime
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not only that
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these areas are among those where murders
also
 happens.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
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teenagers without adult supervision can get caught by
this
 type of criminals.
Secondaly
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Secondly
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prostitution and other sexual
tabooes
excluded from use or mention
taboos
 are prominent here.
if
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If
young mind
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the young mind
don't get
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doesn't get
 true guidance
by
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from
 their parents on
this
 and if they are allowed to be free even if in late night parties and
nightouts
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night outs
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it can have
harmful impact
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a harmful impact
harmful impacts
 at
this
 vulnerable age
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which is mostly a time of their life to focus mainly on a career.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 that
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Acoording
(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with
according
 to my view
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allow children to experience everything by
hisself
reflexive form of "him"
himself
herself
 is definitely desirable.
However
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adult supervision is crucial when it comes to late night outs.

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