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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

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Obesity is a big problem right now around the world, and one of the main reasons the number of people suffering from
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 problem keeps going up is believed to be the high consumption of fast
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, many governments of countries have decided to impose a higher tax on
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 kind of
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, to discourage people from eating it. And I don’t agree with
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, imposing higher taxes on fast
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 will most likely be
unaffordable
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 to the less fortunate people, which will force them to stay at home and cook their own meals, which is probably a lot healthier, more nutritious and way cheaper, and that’s great news.
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, there are still so many people out there who are so stubborn that they are not discouraged by the high price, and still continue to buy and consume fast
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 that, most fast
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 consumers include not only overweight people, but
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 a lot of people who have so much work on their schedules that they don’t have the time to cook themselves a fresh meal, and force them to buy fast
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, even if they know the health problems it brings to them. And that’s one main reason why it is so popular, is because they
are cooked
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cook
 in a few minutes, which is so convenient, while healthier choices are not available. So
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 of increasing the tax rate, the government should definitely think of producing fresher items for the community’s well being. But if they are unable to do so, they should at least invest in fast
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 restaurants to put out more nutritious and cheaper
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, but at the same time still have in it the deliciousness. In conclusion, increasing the tax on fast
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 won’t do much to prevent people from eating it, but
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 they should focus on bringing out more health giving products, as well as making it cheaper and more accessible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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