In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

Obesity is a big problem right now around the world, and one of the main reasons the number of people suffering from
this
problem keeps going up is believed to be the high consumption of fast
food
.
Therefore
, many governments of countries have decided to impose a higher tax on
this
kind of
food
, to discourage people from eating it. And I don’t agree with
this
.
Firstly
, imposing higher taxes on fast
food
will most likely be
unaffordable
to the less fortunate people, which will force them to stay at home and cook their own meals, which is probably a lot healthier, more nutritious and way cheaper, and that’s great news.
However
, there are still so many people out there who are so stubborn that they are not discouraged by the high price, and still continue to buy and consume fast
food
.
Besides
that, most fast
food
consumers include not only overweight people, but
also
a lot of people who have so much work on their schedules that they don’t have the time to cook themselves a fresh meal, and force them to buy fast
food
, even if they know the health problems it brings to them. And that’s one main reason why it is so popular, is because they
are cooked
Suggestion
cook
in a few minutes, which is so convenient, while healthier choices are not available. So
instead
of increasing the tax rate, the government should definitely think of producing fresher items for the community’s well being. But if they are unable to do so, they should at least invest in fast
food
restaurants to put out more nutritious and cheaper
food
, but at the same time still have in it the deliciousness. In conclusion, increasing the tax on fast
food
won’t do much to prevent people from eating it, but
instead
they should focus on bringing out more health giving products, as well as making it cheaper and more accessible.
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