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Advantages & Disadvantages essay A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as the main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also lead to numerous problems if not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

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These days, in some
countries
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country's
tourism
 remain the main source of
income
,
however unless
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however, unless
 the numerous problems in
tourism
 are corrected correctly.
This
 essay will discuss why advantages rely on
tourism
 is eclipsed the numerous challenges how
environmental
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environment
, in the sense that thanks
for
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to
tourism
 in some countries provide
income
 which
also
 help with new jobs.
To begin
 with disadvantages,
tourism
 can
also
 lead to numerous problems how with environmental
this
 is because of
tourism
 building a lot of hotels and facilities which are used to cut down forests and run the environment. There is ample evidence to support
this
 fact, example in South Korea a lot of facilities for
tourism
, which led to the extinction of rare species of flora and fauna. If the construction of the building were right, it would not affect the ecology. Despite the fact that
tourism
 is bad for the environment.
Tourism
 as the main resource of
income
 in some countries, which help with new
jobs there
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jobs, there
 is because develop
tourism
 in
country
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the country
a country
 help provide
income
 from foreign tourists which spent their money in shops and attractions,
furthermore
 thanks
for
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to
tourism
 local people can find new jobs because there are objects
for
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of
tourism
.
For
example in
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example, in
 Turkey am unemployed
feel
the dressed skin of an animal (especially a large animal)
fell
 80
precent
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percent
 due to
tourism
 development. Seen in
this lights
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this light
these lights
, it is founded to claim that
tourism
 is the main source of
income
 in some countries. To conclude, in some
countries
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country's
tourism
 remain the main source of
income
, but
tourism
also
 lead more problems, if not corrected correctly. From the arguments and examples, I think that benefits
tourism
give
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gives
 the money for country and outweigh environmental concerns. 274 words

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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