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Discussion essay It is thought by some that it is better to live in the city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#discussion #city #life #countryside
Many people believe that life in urban areas is much better than in countrysides, while some of them think the opposite. I personally agree that cities as places to live are much more preferable than the villages. But
nevertheless
,
this
 essay will discuss both views.
City
Suggestion
The city
 is thought by some individuals to be the best place to live. There are a lot of opportunities for business and cooperation with big companies in urban areas for everyone, so a person who lives there can make a good career ladder for himself. I absolutely agree with that point of view and
start-ups
the act of setting in operation
startups
status
stereotypes
 here are the best example, as 98% of them, according to the statistics, have been launched in big cities over the
last
 20 years in China. If they had not been located in
such
 places as their ones, they would have failed all their beginnings in business.
On the other hand
, whether living in cities is better than in rural areas is
also
 a controversial topic for some humans
to discuss
Suggestion
discuss
 about, because they believe that
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
 is more beneficial for them. The main reason of that view is a good environment and ecological situation out of cities. They opine that in villages there is a clear air and a lot of greenery, while cities are very polluted and have very little pure nature in them.
However
, I
do not agree
Suggestion
have not agreed
 with that as cities today are getting greened
too and
Accept comma addition
too, and
as a result
,
atmosphere
Suggestion
the atmosphere
 is becoming cleaner than it was before. To cite an example, in the city of New York there will have been planted more than a million trees by 2040.
This
 example shows that the ecology in cities is not so contaminated as some people believe. In conclusion, cities give a lot of chances to make a career for a person and some individuals think that in villages there is a better environment, but looking at all the opportunities urban areas provide and
also
 improving
environment
Suggestion
environmental
 conditions in them, people must choose cities as a place to live.
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