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Last week, you celebrated your birthday with some friends in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed yourselves very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter: Mention the food and service. Explain that you really enjoyed the atmosphere. Suggest any improvements to make things better

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing to convey my sincere appreciation for the exceptional experience I had celebrating my 15th birthday at your establishment on Wednesday, March 27th. The attentiveness and professionalism displayed by your service staff were truly commendable.
In particular
, I would like to extend my gratitude to Janet for her unwavering diligence in ensuring our satisfaction throughout the evening.
Furthermore
, the culinary offerings were nothing short of outstanding. The dishes were not only delectable but
also
 showcased a remarkable level of innovation and artistry. The vibrant and convivial atmosphere, characterized by tasteful décor and the captivating melodies provided by live musicians, fostered a sense of relaxation and merriment amongst my companions. We all thoroughly enjoyed ourselves, engaging in lively conversation and even indulging in spontaneous dancing.
However
, I would like to offer a humble suggestion. One of my friends adhered to a vegetarian dietary philosophy, and he found the menu to be somewhat lacking in vegetarian options.
Nonetheless
, I extend my heartfelt thanks for the exemplary service provided. Yours faithfully, Arthur.
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task achievement
Try to add more specific details about the food and atmosphere in order to fully achieve all parts of the task.
coherence cohesion
Ensure transitions between ideas are as smooth as possible to maintain a logical structure.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is very polite and appropriate for the context, which is excellent.
logical structure
The organization of the letter is effective, with clear paragraphs devoted to different aspects of the experience.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are timely and well executed.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exceptional service
  • culinary delights
  • intriguing ambiance
  • meticulous attention
  • flavorful concoctions
  • impeccable presentation
  • charming decor
  • ambient music
  • constructive feedback
  • vegetarian options
  • seating arrangement
  • heartfelt appreciation
  • wholeheartedly recommend
  • return visit
  • enhance the experience
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