Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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which helps in exams or things like that, cooperating teaches a person to Use synonyms
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experiments and correct each other's mistakes.
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during their lives. Consist in the Olympics helps students improve their minds and Use synonyms
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is one of the best things because they will pass exams only with brains. Linking Words
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, after graduating school applicants will be competitive to enter the university, so at Linking Words
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with a partner who is smarter than them they can notice their partner's mistakes and correct them together. Use synonyms
For example
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, many Linking Words
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whole their lives they can not live without other's advice or feedback. Each person should have their Change preposition
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines both points of view that you will be discussing. Currently, your introduction mixes personal opinion too early.
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Expand your main arguments with more relevant specific examples. This will help clarify your points and make your essay more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Improve the use of linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of your essay. Utilize words like 'Additionally', 'Moreover', or 'However' to connect your ideas better.
coherence cohesion
Work on sentence structure and grammar to avoid fragmented sentences and ensure clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, which is essential for coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
You have effectively mentioned both viewpoints regarding competition and cooperation, which is critical for task achievement.
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The examples you provided, such as competition improving minds and cooperation benefiting weaker students, are well-chosen and relevant.
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