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The maps illustrates the changings of the city center in 25 years

The maps illustrates the changings of the city center in 25 years
The maps illustrate how the
city
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 centre has developed over the 25
year
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years
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 - period.
As
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An
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an
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overall
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, there have been significant changes in the infrastructure,
building
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buildings
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 and facilities. İn 1995,the
city
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 centre had a forest park and
a
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farmland in the east of
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city
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the city
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.There were some houses along the main road which run through the
city
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 from north to south.İn addition,a shop,a fish market,a hotel and a cafe were located in the south of the
city
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. Currently, only the cafe and a hotel remain from the original site.One of the most significant development is
about
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in
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 the
sport
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 fields.Tennis and Golf have overtaken the land previously occupied by
the
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farmland and the forest park.
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,
government
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the government
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 has demolished the shops and developed a restaurant.The main road has been extended to the west and few houses have been constructed along the road.İn the south of the
city
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, there are neither fish markets, nor a fishing port left.A final change is that the apartments have been set up opposite the restaurant over there

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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