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Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

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Environmental
degradation
 has been a global issue which different countries over the years has been tackling on how to resolve with little or no improvement. The
degradation
 of our
environment
 is caused by both nature and human activities and the solution would involve the
government
 making
deliberate effort
Suggestion
a deliberate effort
deliberate efforts
such
 as enacting laws and process that would make our
environment
 more conducive for human existence.
To begin
, nature is one of the major
factor
Suggestion
factors
 of
degradation
.
This
 is mostly experienced by areas that are prone to natural hazards like
earthquake
Suggestion
earthquakes
an earthquake
 or flooding. Once an area encounters a volcanic eruption the land becomes volatile and condemned, the threat of experiencing
such
 attach again would make people desist from the land.
This
 was the case of Bonny
Island which
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Island, which
 after the earthquake attach in 1990 has been left isolated till date. Another major cause of
degradation
 of our
environment
 is human activities which mostly lead to pollution and ware out of our soil. It is inevitable not to experience air pollution in our urban cities that are over populated and the rural areas suffer from erosion caused by farming. The remedy to
this
 issue would include a cautious effect from the
government
 to regulate the activities of the citizens. Laws and policies on how to minimize air pollution on a daily basis could be formulated and monitoring the portion of land the villagers use for farming is a welcoming step. The farming policy of 2018 made the federal
government
 is an example of
such
 policy.
Environment
Suggestion
An environment
 that suffer from natural hazards could be prevented or monitored to ensure the safety of citizens. With adequate monitoring with technology hazards like flooding could be predicted and
also
 avoided. To conclude, environmental
degradation
 is an issue that cannot be totally
eradicated but
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eradicated, but
 with the help of the
government
 and individuals taking up their responsibilities in ensuring the safety of their
environment
 the effect of
degradation
 will be minimized.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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