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In some countries, criminal trials are shown on television for the public. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some countries provide people with access to the details of lawsuits via television or the internet. In my opinion, there is more negative impact to the public by doing
this
 and to make better use of
this
 information, only important and useful facts should be presented to public. There are more disadvantages by telecasting criminal trials to the public.
Firstly
, many people, especially children struggles psychologically when they hear about crimes.
In other words
, knowing about crimes and watching criminal prosecutions interferes with people thought process and disturbs them mentally. Some individuals may
also
 want to commit similar crime or hurt people around them, while others many feel terrifying and have nervous breakdown which impacts their physical health.
On the other hand
, telecasting crimes may bring awareness to people about the society and caution them to be more careful.
For example
, knowing about a kidnap case or theft in their area can alert people and inform them on what preventive measures can be taken to avoid similar situations.
In addition
, some of the actions taken in criminal trials may help people to learn about
law
Suggestion
the law
, how it works, and information presented will help educate them about medicine which can be utilized in a positive way.
However
, the government can just share main facts of what is useful to the society
instead
 of presenting the complete trial. In conclusion, telecasting criminal prosecutions does more harm to the public by interfering with lives and to make better use of the crime information, only important facts that help public should be shared
instead
 of complete trials.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transparency
  • public oversight
  • judicial system
  • educational value
  • privacy concerns
  • re-traumatizing
  • juror behavior
  • fairness
  • public opinion
  • media sensationalism
  • impartiality
  • economic benefits
  • legal proceedings
  • misinterpretation
  • broadcasters
  • legal institutions
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