Now a lot of people in college are doing academic study. We should encourage them to learn vocational skills. Do you agree or disagree.

It is
debatable issue
Suggestion
a debatable issue
that whether people continue their
further
study or they should learn professional skills. I believe that people must complete their academic qualification.
Majority
Suggestion
The majority
of the people are going to college in order to complete their study. If they do not go colleges for their education, so, they can not get a high paid
job
because if they want to do high salary
job
, pupils must have
acquire
Suggestion
acquired
knowledge
.
For instance
, unless a person become
doctor
Suggestion
doctors
, if he or she does not have
required
Suggestion
the required knowledge
knowledge
. The chances of a good profession
is increased
Suggestion
are increasing
are increased
, with the assistance of essential academic skills.
Moreover
, learners can broaden their horizons of
knowledge
whey they study in college or university. The competition in the
job
market is increasing, those candidates who have not a sound
knowledge
, they
can not
can not
cannot
get a
job
.
company
Suggestion
A company
Company
The company
mostly accepted those workers who have a vast
knowledge
related to a specific field.
Instead
of
this
, if people
focuse
the concentration of attention or energy on something
focus
focused
only on vocational skills without
going college,
Suggestion
going to college,
they can become self esteem and
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their fundamental needs. They can get practical
knowledge
and hand on experience which is useful in their
occupation
Suggestion
occupational
field. To recapitulate,
learning process
Suggestion
the learning process
should be continued before entering
job
realms.
Job
prospects and pay escalated owing to qualifications.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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