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The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives information about the percentage breakdown of
movies
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movie
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 categories coming in 2012 in the UK and
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Ireland. It indicates the
amount
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number
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 of films and the proportion
from
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 ticket sales by each genre. In general, the three largest
number
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 of releases fell into Drama, Documentary and Comedy, with roughly 24%, 24% and 18%, respectively. Romance, Action and Biopic types constituted the smallest proportion, which
were
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 all far less than 5%. The four remaining kinds
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 in between, which ranged from nearly 5% to 10%. Interestingly,
although
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were
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 at the top, very few people were willing to pay for
it
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 at
theaters
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,
less
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and less
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 than 10% of its income came from selling tickets in 2012.
However
, the most profitable type was the
third
 largest volume, Comedy, which benefitted nearly 50%
from
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 their cinema audiences. The least interesting genre
at
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movie
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theater
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theaters
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 might be Romance as
such
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 figure in
this
 genre was only 0.8%, which was quite humble.
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