the graphs show basic information about employment.
The graphs represent how many disabled
people
and non-disable
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non-disabled
people
are working and how much they earn?
Change the punctuation
.
Overall
, the percentage
of disabled employees
are
less than Correct subject-verb agreement
is
non-disable
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non-disabled
employees
, and salaries are lower than too.
The employment graph shows, 90 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
employees
are healthy people
without any disability
. Over 80% of participants at work have several disabilities. Fix the agreement mistake
disabilities
This
percentage
is very close to no
disability Correct article usage
the no
percentage
. However
, the minimum percentage
of employees
are
some Correct subject-verb agreement
is
people
have severely disabled. For example
, they need a wheelchair or crutches. It is about 30%.
The second
graph is about the average monthly salary. No disabled people
have more salary between
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than
two
other categories and it is 2000$ per month. The Correct article usage
the two
second
group is no
severely disabled means they have some limitations in some activities. They earn under 2000$ per month. The Correct your spelling
not
last
group that has several disabilities earn just 1000# per month. It is lower than in other groups.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, percentage, employees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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