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People who start a university course but do not complete it should be fined. Do you agree or disagree?

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Of the number of undergraduates that begin a
course
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 of tertiary study, there
is
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are
 a percentage of those that do not finish the
course
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, but the argument that they should
therefore
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 be financially penalised is riddled with potential problems. It needs to be considered
first
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 of all what motivated the
student
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 to leave their studies before they have graduated. If the decision was made due to financial constraints,
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 clearly adding an additional fine is simply adding to the pressure.
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, there are many older people who decide to go back to university but may already have a mortgage and dependent children, and may
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 find that their income is insufficient to cover their needs.
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, rather than attempting to make the
student
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 pay, it might be better to consider whether the
student
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 was actually given sufficient support during their studies. There are situations where the
student
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 may feel that they are not following the
course
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 and are
unable complete the
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unable to complete the
 required assignments, and
therefore
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 leave the
course
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. Retention rates may be improved if there were personal tutors on hand to offer advice to those students who are losing confidence in their ability to remain on the
course
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.
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, there is an argument that the risk of a penalty would dissuade people from starting courses that they were not particularly motivated to complete in the
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 place. In conclusion,
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,
although
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 the idea of being charged for non completion of a
course
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 would perhaps reduce the number of uncommitted enrolments, it is not an advisable solution for genuine students.
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