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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum. To what extent do you agree?

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A vast mass of people sees the decision of obesity by involving more physical
education
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 lessons in the
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 schedule. Sports activities are the most essential subject of children in
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. I completely agree with it , and I think it will help to plummeting the number of overweight people. One of the most important questions of the health care system today is increasing number of people who suffer from obesity and diabetes. Both of
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 depends on the lifestyle of people, which includes a healthy food and
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 activity. Good nutrients that have good vitamins
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 stimulate to keep weight. The research of the medical institute shows that the life expectancy of
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-oriented people is more 20 years than people who is not doing the
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 activity. There is the likelihood that by doing physical exercises, we will live a prosperous life. And from
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 person has to understand the efficiency of moving activities. It will be good if we early form the habit doing sports for children. Physical
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 lessons not only provide stronger immune system, but
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 it elaborates the discipline and a solid character of children.
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, doing more activities in
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 prompted my passion for professional
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,
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 and I perceived by eminent sportsman and was in the « International Tennis Club». Children should cease the mind from daily educational routine and be immersed in the
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. The growing number of the obese people can be eliminated by introducing more physical
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 lesson in
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. Despite the
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 will boost the immune system of children, and even will conducive to build their tough character. I relatively after more physical
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 lessons in
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