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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 modern world, it is observed by some politicians and authorities that since the increasing of using internet tools, citizens have been preferring to use them rather than face to face communication. I believe that cutting-edge technologies are part of our life and it has affected us in a positive way.
First
 of all, people have been struggling with a financial crisis since the 1990s. Due to that reason, they tend to do overtime and it caused people to meet with their friends and relatives less than before.
However
, thanks to social media, they could be able to contact them easily and cement their bonds of relationships.
For instance
, family members could communicate with each other via some applications
such
 as Skype
although
 they stay in overseas countries.
Furthermore
, humanity has been facing a different kind of viruses for a while and governments announce that citizens should not go out often and ensure that with some regulations
such
 as temporary curfews.
For example
, to prevent spread of the virus, members of societies could prefer to use
such
 applications.
Besides
 the advantage of social media, it should not be forgotten that there are several disadvantages
such
 as being a social and cultural corruption.
Firstly
, the human being is able to adapt to any situation.
In other words
, if using the tools increase dramatically, they might forget being social. It causes several health problems and especially anxiety.
Secondly
, culture is one of the key features for any community.
For instance
, the Mediterranean culture expects people to be involved in group activities and one to one interaction. If those peoples who live in these countries alter their habits, cultural corruption would be inevitable. In conclusion, in the light of the information given above, even if there are minor drawbacks which could be easily solved, I am convinced that the positive effects of the communication tools have solid and proven advantages, which are not only decreasing the rate of spreading of the viruses but
also
 cementing the bond between family members.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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