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In recent years, television has contributed most to changing the quality of life of ordinary people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some people that in
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last few years
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the last few years
 watching
television
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 has the most effect in changing the quality of life of normal people. In
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 essay I totally agree because our life had become lazier and more comfortable.
To begin
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 with, I think that in recent years people are watching
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 a lot, which make them lazier than others in the past years. Before
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, people went out to walk or play in their free times. Nowadays, they just sit in front of the TV and watch different movies and series. To illustrate
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, a recent report in life monthly magazine showed that 60% of people watching
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 at their free time, in
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 15 years. Another important point to consider is that individuals feeling more relaxed when watching T.V.
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that
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 is due to make them know the news in their city, country and
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 in all over the worlds without moving from their chair.
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, they can buy various things,
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 as tables, toothpaste and food, just from the advertisement they had watched them, without going to the supermarkets.
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, a Carrefour hypermarket report on April 2016, stated that the number of people who buying through Advertainment on
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 increased by 50%
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 7 years. To conclude, many individuals think that
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 has various changed in our activity, I firmly believe that
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 change has an advantages and disadvantages, we have to know how to use
television
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 in a good way.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • access
  • information
  • platform
  • entertainment
  • escapism
  • awareness
  • exposure
  • cultures
  • improved
  • education
  • learning opportunities
  • development
  • news
  • journalism
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