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Fast food is becoming a part of people's daily life everywhere, and this has had negative effects on our lifestyles and diet.Do you agree with this statement?

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In today's era the fitness is
vital role
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a vital role
 for prominent in cultural society and It's only depends on what kinds of
food
 are
consume
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consumed
.
However
, fast
food
 is more likely
prefare
like better; value more highly
prefer
preferred
 rather than dietary foods by people and it's proven that it has
bunch
Suggestion
a bunch
 of negative effects on stomach cycle. To commence with
fast
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the fast food trend
food
 trend. Today's era are more dependent on
readyment
food whereas
Accept comma addition
food, whereas
 people can meet their friends and relatives and
taste
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tastiest
tasteless
 variety of instant
food
 dishes.
For example
, A survey
has been depict
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has been depicted
 that In India most of the college students
are get
Suggestion
are getting
get
 together at a fast
food
 store rather grouping at home. Which means they don't have to make up dishes at home, and enjoy delicious dishes.
However
, there has lots of demerits influence by consuming
premade
 or unhealthy foods. Fast
food
 like as - Pizza
,
Accept space
,
 sub
,
Accept space
,
and sandwiches. It has been made up while ago when
it's
the thing named or in question
it
its
 comes to eat, because the main base should be need long time to catch up
food
 standards.
For instance
, the pizza base has been made a day ago, which
ahs
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
has
 been proven by an article was published by Pizza hut which is
wel
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
well
 known pizza brand.
Consequently
, it's very harmful on dietary function, as
result people
Suggestion
a result, people
a result people
 are gaining weight and more obese.
Moreover
,
this
kinds
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kind
 of fast
food
 leads to disease like, diabetes and high blood pressure. To sum up, fast
food
 should be
avoid
Suggestion
avoided
 by people which has
worsen
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worsened
 effects on physical and metal body.
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