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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Discuss

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Todays, with the sharp increase in crime rate, different kind of punishment methods have been used.
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 as community services, fines as well as imprisonment. Some people think putting criminals in jail is the most effective approach to reduce crimes while others are against it. I personally agree locking up is the one of useful manner for the offence. In
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 essay I’m going to justify and giving some reasonable answers for my opinion.
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, I strongly think, it is the best way step for controlling crime by separating criminals from individuals.
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, people who with violence and drugging as well as youth offenders have a huge risk and negative influence of other ordinary people.
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, those vast majority of criminals are ill-educated. If those inmates take a re-education and law training in correctional facilities. They could understand deeply what kind of things are illegal actions in society, after
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 for the most part of them could have a chance for rehabilitation. On the other means, Victim will be away from getting injury from them.
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, jailing a person is a practice to avoid the death penalty.
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, fines as well home arrest-curfew-electronic tag is another imprisonment to inmates.
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, we still can see the many phenomena of that those offenders refund after taking fines or curfew nowadays.
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, most Lesser financial criminals generally think paying a fine to police just a simple warning. As a consequence, they would commit crime again as long as wouldn’t be found by police.
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, we cannot trust the behaviour of not rehabilitated criminals.
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, I just think having a short prison time, maybe could be a valid way idea to deduce some minor unlawful actions. Overall, I can’t say prison is the best action of punishment for all sorts of offences, but it is able to be one.
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