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Junk food advertising has a harmful effect on society and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 the past few years, the consumption of fast foods has immensely increased all over the world. According to many, adverts are to be blamed for the change. Many scholars have suggested placing a ban on
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 advertisements due to the increasing consumption and impact on the health of society. In my opinion, I completely agree with the aforementioned proposition and I will explain in
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 essay why. The primary reason why prohibiting the endorsement of junk food is plausible lies in the fact that they have a huge impact on consumers buying choices. Owing to the fact that advertisements are ubiquitous it subconsciously impacts the purchasing decision. According to studies on consumer behaviour, more than 60% of consumers develop an urge to buy due to the advertisements. In short, endorsing fast-food chains can significantly impact the choices that consumers make and
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, the prohibition will be justifiable action for the
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, the advertisements are uninformative. Even though the companies don’t fail to tempt consumers with their fascinating portrays and claims
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 don’t showcase the ingredients which may
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 harm one and possibly change the buying decision.
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, to avert customers from misinformation implications seems reasonable. To conclude, advertisements play a major role in our eating habits. As discussed their effect on our decisions is immense and falsifying information
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 prohibiting them would be favourable to society.
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