Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music brings only benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however, think that music can have a negative influence on both. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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is playing in any societies and cultures all over the world.Someone thought that,

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have profits in both single persons and societies.

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bad affective on both sides.These two views will discuss in following.As well as I strongly believe the

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keep people lively and happy while others have negative point about

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is very popular in various part of mankind societies. Any time people feel sad and

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it is a good example, people can access it

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make people isolated from others and it

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negatively

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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283 words

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Harmony
Melody
Rhythm
Socio-cultural
Artistic expression
Cognitive development
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Moral implications
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Authenticity
Commercialization
Media literacy
Sensory overload
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