Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music brings only benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however, think that music can have a negative influence on both. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the
music
is playing in any societies and cultures all over the world.Someone thought that,
music
have profits in both single persons and societies.
On the other hand
, someone else thinking that the
music
have
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has
bad affective on both sides.These two views will discuss in following.As well as I strongly believe the
music
keep people lively and happy while others have negative point about
music
.
Music
is very popular in various part of mankind societies. Any time people feel sad and
alone they
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alone, they
try to
playing
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play
the
music
which is good for memory to keep fresh,
also
it is very interesting entertainment.
For example
,
some times particularly
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sometimes, particularly
sometimes particularly
youth
have
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has
nothing
to do they listen
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do they listen
to the
music
and pass their
times
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time
. Almost
music
being
playing
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played
in any part of societies and
cultures so
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cultures, so
it
have
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has
a lot supporters among people either men and woman old and young.
However
,
music
have
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has
negative influence which
are seen
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is seen
clear
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clearly
in societies.
music
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Music
is available massively and people can
playing
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play
anytime even
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anytime, even
at work if they allow.
So specially
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So, specially
, young folk addicted to it. The internet
in
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on
mobile devices provided any kind of
music
it is a good example, people can access it
every where
to or in any or all places
everywhere
and every time.
listen
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Listen
too much on
music
make people isolated from others and it
bring
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brings
addiction as well. In conclusion,
music
have a lot of fans
every where
to or in any or all places
everywhere
in the world it
is use
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is used
uses
as individuals and
culturals
a particular society at a particular time and place
cultures
,
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,
more importantly the
music
show is
most famous event
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the most famous event
which held as concerts.
In
contrast people
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contrast, people
are suffering
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by
listen
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listening
too much
music
the result would be
negative
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negatively
impact
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impacted
.
This
essay discussed clearly in both
point
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points
of views
also
the personal opinion
been widely described
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widely described
has widely been described
was widely described
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harmony
  • Melody
  • Rhythm
  • Socio-cultural
  • Artistic expression
  • Cognitive development
  • Soundtrack
  • Moral implications
  • Acoustic ecology
  • Intellectual property
  • Authenticity
  • Commercialization
  • Media literacy
  • Sensory overload
  • Acculturation
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