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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer language in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is a fact that there are a lot of languages on
this
 earth, but every year several of the languages just disappear. A group of people believes that the extinction of some languages is not a crucial problem for communication will be more effective with fewer languages.
Although
 some people think that the extinction of some languages is not a serious problem, I do believe that the diversity of the
world
 languages has a lot of benefits for the individual and the society as well.
To begin
 with, it is undeniable that out of hundreds of languages that have existed, few languages extinct every year. It is believed that the disappearance was due to the globalisation and the Westernisation of the European and American, which have forced people to communicate in International languages
such
 as English, German or French. Other people have an opinion that the extinction of the languages is not a serious threat to the countries since most of them that die out are minority languages which are spoken by several people.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 would not make a significant impact on the earth.
Besides
 that, the usage of several international languages has made business interaction or diplomatic negotiation among nations or continents become easier.
On the other hand
, the uncountable number of languages that have existed shows the uniqueness of the
world
 cultures. It is necessary to maintain the diversity of the
world
 languages for each of the languages represents the identity of a community or a tribe.
Besides
 that,
although
 some of the languages might only be spoken by several people, it has an important function. Many of the traditional myths are written or documented in the minority languages, and if they die out,
then
 the culture would
also
 be lost. In conclusion, I personally disagree with the opinion that with only several languages that exist in the
world
, life will be easier. I believe that the variety of languages show the richness of the
world
 civilizations and they should be passed to the
next
 generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic diversity
  • endangered languages
  • homogenization
  • cross-cultural communication
  • language preservation
  • intellectual diversity
  • cultural heritage
  • language revitalization
  • monolingual
  • multilingualism
  • dialects
  • ethnolinguistics
  • language policy
  • lingua franca
  • universal language
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