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With a growing world population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people . Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays
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 the need for
food
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 is increasing due to the rising number of people living in the world. People have
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unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
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 views about the usage of genetically modified foods in
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order to solve this
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 I do not agree with the statement given
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above, due
 to my concerns whether they are healthy or not
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 It is true that our world population is expanding day by day
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located or moved above the surround or above the normal position
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 become a significant problem
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 In recent years
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 GM foods invented by scientists so as to obtain nutrient quickly
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 are seen as a solution
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, there is no evidence about these foods include all the substances which are necessary for our health
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 as vitamins and minerals.
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 GM foods may be helpful to solve
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food problem
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the food problem
food problems
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the short term
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 they can lead to perilous health problems stemming from lack of vitamins and minerals
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diabets
a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst
diabetes
 and hypertension
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 Other people who claim that GM foods are useful
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 can be traders
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 As the production of these nutrients
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 cheaper than normal foods cultivated in fields
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 they may be thinking of making
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profits
a profit
 without spending money on agriculture affairs
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, they ought to realize that spreading use of GM foods
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 not only damage people's
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health
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 lead to extinction of agriculture which has the significant effect on atmosphere by releasing oxygen
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as these foods can affect people and world dangerously
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 In my opinion
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 they should not be used
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 In conclusion
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 genetically modified foods are assessed as a solution to meet the urgent
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 the use of these foods might be hazardous in different ways.

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